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The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.

The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.
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The pie chart below displays the adults proportions in Canada
that
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who
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 own one
car
 , multiple
cars
, or who do not have
car
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a car
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.
Overall
,the majority of Canadian people own one
car
,
however
 , there
is
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are
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 some
candian
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Candian
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 have 2
moter
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motor
cars
.
Also
, there is
small
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a small
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 proportion of
canadian
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Canadian
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indivduals
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individuals
 do not own a
car
. A few
percentage
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per cent
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 of
canadians
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Canadians
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 have more than 1
car
. More than 50% of
canadians
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Canadians
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 own 1
car
 which
represent
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represents
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 a high proportion of
canadia
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Canadia
Canadian
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 people.
Moreover
, Some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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canadians
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Canadians
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 own more than two
cars
repersented
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represented
 as half of the pie chart which is around 45%.Around 30% of
canadians
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Canadians
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 do not have
car
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a car
the car
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 , but there is near 10% of them have over two
cars
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, cars, canadians with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Percentage
  • Ownership
  • Trend
  • Urban
  • Rural
  • Public transportation
  • Environmental impact
  • Government policies
  • Subsidy
  • Electric cars
  • Cultural attitudes
  • Income level
  • Economic factors
  • Technological advancement
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