The graph shows changes in the sales of musical instruments in the UK from 2008 to the present and gives predictions for future sales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows changes in the sales of musical instruments in the UK from 2008 to the present and gives predictions for future sales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The liner graph below illustrates the changes in the musical instrument
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in
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Kingdom from 2009 until now
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and predicts the ratio
payment
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in the future.
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, in 2011 compact disc
sales
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were at a peak in comparison with other methods of
sales
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, but they gradually dropped over the years and are predicted to reach less than a
quartar
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quarter
of the
payment
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in 2011.
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,the download
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also
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steadily increased until it reached the top of their
sales
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in 2014,but
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this
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year there was
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decline in the
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.
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,
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method
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predicted
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to fall less than half of the per cent. The lowest
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percentage
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of
sales
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was the streams,yet it grew dramatically over the years and is predicted to be the most used
method
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of music
sales
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in the future. The CD
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started as the top
method
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that
preferred
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by the majority of UK citizens with
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a
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percentage
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of 55%.
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,
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form continued to be
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preferred until significantly dropped in 2015 to 30% ,and continued to fall until reached 38%by 2018. It predicted that by 2024 the use of
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mode of sale will no longer exist. The download
method
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shows
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increased
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in the
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of use for
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method
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from 2011 with 35% until reached more than 40% by 2014 which is the highest
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sales
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achievement in the UK,
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, it dropped slightly over the years to 30% in 2018 .
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method
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,
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will be used by fewer people in 2024. Streams began as the lowest type of music
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which presented with less than 10% in 2011 ,but it sharply increased until reached a peak in 2018 at 40%
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percentage
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going to increase more and more by 2024 and it may exceed 60% as a preferred
method
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for music pay in the UK.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words payment, sales, method, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 5 times.
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