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While some think that art is an important subject for children too study, others think it is waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#think #art #children #study #waste #time
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According to
 different
individuals
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 the subject of drawing has had more valuation than
other
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others
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,
however
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however,
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 few thought
that is
waste
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a waste
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 of time. The pros and cons of
this
 scenario are
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discussed
with
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To begin
 with, there are various
subjects
 taught by
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the school
a school
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school
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schools
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 in recent times,
while
 some of
subjects
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the subjects
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 are
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included
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 as
curiculum
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curriculum
such
 as art and creativity.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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more creative
idea
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ideas
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 have been developed by
child
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children
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due to
 pictorial representation and it would be very easy to remember for them.
For instance
,
the
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apply
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children having
a
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creativity
of
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 drawing are much more intelligent than any other and
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their mind
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mind
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minds
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is
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are
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 20% sharper than others. As viewing another side, the personages are
wasteing
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wasting
thier
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their
 time for it and they could not develop their
thechnical
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technical
 knowledge in major
subjects
such
 as maths
as well as
 science.
Apart from
this
, there is more importance
of
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 technical
subjects
 than any other in the era of technology.
To conclude
, not only technical knowledge is important but
also
 art creativity is
also
play
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plays
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an
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a
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crusial
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crucial
 role
for
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in
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 developing their career.
According to
 my point of view, I
am agree
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 with the given notion.
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