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Some universities now offer thier courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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There is no denying the fact
taht
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that
 online
clasess
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classes
class
 now is one of the
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possible
 ways for
students
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 to study in universities.
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 it is commonly belief that some
people
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this
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 way of
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studying
, there is
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 an argument that online lectures are easy and comfortable.
this
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my
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opinion
. On one hand,
universites
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universities
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relased
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released
 some apps for
this
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 type of study,
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 which is a website
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students
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 to reach
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their
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 classes on
internet
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 all
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 the world. In other
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,
people
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 who study abroad
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this
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 invention because of the time.
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, in order for them
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attends
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attend
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thier
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their
 classes they need to save
their
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time and not waste it.
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, when
covid 19
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the COVID-19
 pandemic invaded
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the
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, colleges in
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Saudi Arabia
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 introduced online classes and
students
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 started
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 beneficial degrees during their
studeis
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studies
.
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,
people
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 agree with
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 idea
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have several reasons for that. it is possible to say teachers
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 it because of the cheating on exams and
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assignments
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.
Moreover
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,
students
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 will not learn
effectivly
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effectively
 during their programs
due to
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 the cheating aspect.
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, lazy and
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student
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students
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 will
take
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 good grades because of
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 problem. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On
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balance
,
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,
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 tend to believe that
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 invention will help a lot of
people
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 during their life since
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 easy and comfy for them to attend their lectures.

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task achievement
Consider improving your introduction to provide a clearer thesis statement that directly answers whether this development is positive or negative. Currently, it slightly lacks focus on providing a direct stance.
coherence cohesion
Aim to develop clearer and more cohesive transitions between paragraphs. Using linking words and phrases can help guide readers smoothly from one idea to the next.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples and elaborate on your points to support your arguments fully. This will enrich your essay and make your opinions more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on reducing grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. While minor, these can make your essay harder to read. Proofreading or using grammar checking tools may help.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, providing a solid structure to your response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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