The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The

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chart provides the proportion of

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the unemployment

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unemployment

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population with

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aged from 15-to-24-year-olds compared to

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unemployement

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unemployment

in five different European nations in 2005.

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, the number of people aged between 15-24 years old who not working was higher than

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in all five countries, with Poland's rate

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the most. Looking in more detail, more than 30% of Poland people aged 15-24 years old

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unemployed, which was 10% higher than

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unemployment

. Interestingly, the percentage of

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in Poland had

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similar data

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from

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group age who

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unpaid in Italy, accounting for more than a quarter.

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, in Italy, both categories

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almost half with the dark blue

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(15%) less than the light blue

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. During the same time, Denmark's portion experienced the smallest figure in the dark blue

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with less than 10% even though the proportion of unpaid people aged more than 15 until 24 shared

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number with

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in Hungary, at 12%. Germany,

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slightly diverse

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in both categories, recording 22% for certain

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of unemployed and 2% lower for

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unemployement

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unemployment

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, unemployment with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

191 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

unemployment rate
youth unemployment
overall unemployment
comparison
percentage
aged between
economic conditions
educational system
vocational training
long-term impacts
policy changes
job training programs
disparity
national unemployment rates
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