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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about the demographics of various countries -China, Russia, the
USA
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 and the
UK
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that the highest population is in China,
whereas
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 their
gdp
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GDP
 values
is
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 less compared to other countries.
Furthermore
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, the biggest GDP per capita is in
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USA
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the USA
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, and there is the longest life expectancy in the
UK
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. Looking in more detail, the
top
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apply
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highest
number of
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population is in China at approximately 1.357 billion,
while
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 in terms of the
GPD
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GPD,
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 it is the least one, at 6,807.
Additionally
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, the US comprises
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the second highest population at around 318 million,
while
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this
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 pattern for Russia is lower. When it comes to the
UK
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, though
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the popularion
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popularion
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population
 is about 64 million, making it the least one as opposed to others,
GDP
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the GDP
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 per capita is around 41,787. In terms of the GPD in the
USA
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, it is the highest value around 53k. Regarding
remaining
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the remaining
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 category, the most significant average life expectancy
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in the
UK
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 at around 81.5.
In addition
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,
this
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 figure for China is bigger than Russia, at 75.2 compared to 72.3.
In contrast
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, the
USA
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 have the lowest stat, at 69.2.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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