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It is predicted that with the development of technology, people in the 21st century will have much more free time. To what extent has the prediction come true? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advancement of
technology
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 has an
mpact
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impact
 the
life
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lives
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 of numerous
people
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 over the years. It is predicted that the
people
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 in 21st century will have more free
time
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 as a
results
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result
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 of
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 prediction might happen in the future. It cannot be denied that the existence of
technology
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 significantly
help
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people
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 in their daily lives. From housework, transportation, work field, health care, and other
field
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has
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 been dominated by
technology
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. As a
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, many individuals
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technology
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 as their assistant in their life.
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, there are plenty of robots that can help housewife to do their housework,
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 as cleaning the house, gardening, or cooking.
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people
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to
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have much more free
time
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 than before.
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,
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 phenomenon highly lead to another huge issue in the future, which is unemployment. If
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technology
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 form of
robot
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robots
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 can replace the work of
human
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humans
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, a wide range of job
positition
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position
positions
 will likely
fill
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 with
robot
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robots
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instead
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human
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humans
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.
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, the opportunity to become a housemaid will decline throughout the years since the
technology
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 can do all the work even with
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a shorten
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shorten
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 amount of
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 shows that both the employer and employee with directly
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affected by
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 phenomenon as they can have more free
time
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 than before.
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, I believe
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 is not the kind of free
time
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 that every person
wanted
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wants
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 in their life. The
exitence
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existence
 of
technology
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 should become an assistant not a replacement for
human
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humans
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.
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, the role of
technology
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 that
affect
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affects
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people
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freetime
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free time
 has
acurately
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accurately
 predicted. Nowadays, many individuals use
technology
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 to help them in
daily
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their daily
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 lives.
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, it should be noted that the role of
human
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humans
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still
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 important so
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technology
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wont
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won't
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 replace any human activities in the future.
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