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The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970

The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970
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 information about
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of the population living in cities in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040.
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, it can clearly seen that the
percentage
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 of citizens in
Malaysia
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, Thailand and Indonesia increased gradually,
whereas
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 fluctuated
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over the period of 70 years The figures
of
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population
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the population
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 living in urban areas in Indonesia and
Malaysia
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was
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 13% and 30% in 1970 respectively ,
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 it witnessed
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 continuous increase trend
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until
 2040 at over 60% and 80 respectively.
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,
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 the
proprotion
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proportion
 of citizens living in cities in
Malaysia
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 was the highest figure in 2040. The
percentage
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 of
peole
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people
 living in cities in Thai Lan was approximately 50% in 2024. In
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the Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
, the figures for people living in urban spaces was s30$ in 1970,
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which increased
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 slightly to roughly 50% in 1990.
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 the
percentage
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 reduced considerably to 40% in 2010,
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 went up to over 50% in 2040
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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