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The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.

The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.
#proportions #adults #canada #car #two #cars
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In the
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The
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 above pie chart
that
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apply
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shows the proportions of
adults
 in Canada who own one
car
 ,
two
cars
 , more than
two
cars
 , or who do not own a
car
 . There are four proportions in
this
 chart and the highest percentage is
adults
 who have one
car
 which
represent
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 more than 50%.
Secondly
, the
owner
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owners
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 of
two
vehicless
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vehicles
get
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gets
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second
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a second
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 place
around
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at around
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 30%.
On the other hand
 , the shocking information is that a large number of
adults
who
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apply
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did not own a
car
 .
Lastly
, More than
two
cars
 get the lowest percentage around 10%. In conclusion , The highest percentage of
adults
 in Canada who own one vehicle and the
last
 place goes to
adults
 who have more than
two
cars
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, car, two, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Percentage
  • Ownership
  • Trend
  • Urban
  • Rural
  • Public transportation
  • Environmental impact
  • Government policies
  • Subsidy
  • Electric cars
  • Cultural attitudes
  • Income level
  • Economic factors
  • Technological advancement
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