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The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of total
income
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 spent on different areas by low and
high
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high-income
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income
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 groups in a country in Europe.
Overall
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, clothing accounts for the least amount for both groups,
while
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 food and drink and miscellaneous items are
main
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the main
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 areas on which expenditures
spent
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are spent
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. Looking at the first chart,
low
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low-income
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income
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 group
spend
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spent
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 most of their money on food and drink and fuel bills
comprised
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comprising
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 29% and 24%, respectively. Miscellaneous items
accounts
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account
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 for 18%
with
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apply
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doubling the amount for transport. With regard to clothing and
restaurant
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restaurants
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/hotels, people with low
income
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 use approximately 5% of their money for these items. Moving now to
second
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the second
a second
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 pie chart, the main source of expenditures is
on
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apply
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miscellaneous and recreation/culture
with
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apply
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standing at a fifth of total spending. About 15% of
income
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 is allocated to transport and food and drink which is more than
restaurant
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restaurants
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/hotels by
mere
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a mere
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 4%.
In contrast
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 to
first
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the first
a first
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 pie chart, fuel bills
accounts
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account
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 for only 7% for high incomers and
this
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 proportion is approximately equal to the one for clothing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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