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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares
thedemographic
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the demographic
the demographics
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related
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is related
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 to the biggest four countries in the world.
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, China has a huge
number of
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population count
for
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of
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 1,357,000,000
comparing
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 to others ,
such
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 as the UK
have
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having
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 64,937,000 which means it is less than half of
China
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China's
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populatio
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population
.
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,
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USA
have
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 the highest number of GDP per Capita 53,681 on the opposite side China have 6,807.
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, The country that has
most
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the highest
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 average life expectancy is
UK
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the UK
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 81.5 and it is less
in
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USA
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the USA
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. In conclusion, Bigger countries space
have
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 a large number in
population
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the population
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.
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, there is no huge gap in the average life expectancy of these countries.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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