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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, wild people eat
many
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 traditional
food
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foods
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 cooked in other places
then
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than
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 the local
food
 they can make
it
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apply
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by their
containte
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content
 which
that
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apply
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lead
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leads
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 them to consume a huge quantity of
food
 their body does not need it.
Firstly
, As we can remark our new habbit that
come
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comes
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 from the media about
eat
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eating
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 or
cook
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cooking
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 many different meals that
depands
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depend
 on
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the containt
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containt
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content
 aren't domestic so the super market spread around the world to bring their to be
avalible
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available
 and same local which
are
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is
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unpossible
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impossible
 to be in front of us.
However
 that
setuations
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situations
situation
 do another
affect
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effect
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 on our society and
led
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lead
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 the wealthy level
famlies
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families
 to a death hole, they will have
absoulately
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absolutely
 diseases and heart
attactes
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attacks
 or might
cansers
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cancers
, because they change the human process inside the blood and brain,
morever
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moreover
 the planet
create
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creates
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an
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a
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weirdly
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weird
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 ghost who had killed anyone take
somthing
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something
 not belong to himself.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the
committe
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committee
 of
health
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Health
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 care
decide
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has decided
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 to encourage
the
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apply
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people to change from
the
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apply
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junk
food
 to healthy
food
 by
consume
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consuming
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 these
good
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goods
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 from
another country
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other countries
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 which
follow
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follows
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 the right way to avoid the dead methods of
cooked
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cooking
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, so I
beileve
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believe
 we must increase the rate to be up
then
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than
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 the past
although
 we wish we should
to
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apply
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do more practice how to eat healthy
food
 ?
Finally
, many
family
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families
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had
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have
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been
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apply
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liked to ask the doctors
of
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about
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 the new dishes
that's has
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that have
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 many benefits to
assure
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ensure
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 our new
generation to
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generation's
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 next future .
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