Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, Certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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are
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born with different qualities and capabilities. It is believed that both
men
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and
women
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carries
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special qualities and they should work
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the
field
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that they
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on
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. I completely agree with
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opinion because certain
jobs
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like
constructions
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require physical strength and
masculinitu
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masculinity
which, in my opinion, is more
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for
men
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than
women
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. There are
jobs
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that are heavy and
requires
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physical endurance like general labour and
constructions
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. It is mostly suitable for
men
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as they are born with strong
physique
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not
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everyone, but most of them.
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:
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a recent study,
it
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showed that the physique of
a
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a man
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men
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is stronger than that of a
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women
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woman
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in nature.
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, the majority of employees are male in the
field
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of
constructions
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construction
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,
factories
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and factories
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.
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, that does not mean
women
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are any less than
men
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.
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,
women
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tend to lift heavier and are as
stronger
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as
men
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. Regardless,
men
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are more likely to fit in these
jobs
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than
women
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.
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,
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Jobs
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that
specializes
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in motherhood, social services and
also
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in business fields like restaurants
women
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are
more
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preferred because it is believed that
women
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are very empathetic and
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in nature. Perhaps, you can see majority of employers in restaurants,
social
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and social
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services are female because of their calm nature.
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,
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believe one should be dedicated
in
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certain job
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field
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fields
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to maximize
their
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productivity and
outcome
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the outcome
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of
their
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one
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skill.
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, I completely agree that both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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should be employed
on
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in
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a designated
field
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that they
specializes
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on
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in
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because every job
have
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their
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specific requirements that
provides
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effective outcomes if only done by the right person.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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