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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked rvisitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked rvisitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of a questionnaire that required visitors to the Parkway Hotel
how
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 they showed the hotel's customers by 5 levels of rating in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, every section in the pie chart below shows
a sudden changes
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sudden changes
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 between two different years.
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, satisfactory was the highest figure in 2005, after that, good choice became the most rated in 2010. at the same time, Excellent was the lowest in 2005. and edited to very poor in 2010.
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 with, the excellent part was 5 per cent in 2005. but, it's about six times higher than in 2010.
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, the good grade started
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 14% and increased to 39% to
became
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 the highest rate in 2010.
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, both poor and very poor departments decreased from 21% to 12% for poor.
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 very poor was 15% in 2005 and changed to 4% in 2010.
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, the
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satisfactory
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satisfaction
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 part was higher than others in the first year of
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 questionnaire. after 5 years. it decreased to 17%

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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