The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked rvisitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked rvisitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer  

service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the  

years 2005 and 2010.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of a questionnaire that required visitors to the Parkway Hotel
how
Correct word choice
and how
show examples
they showed the hotel's customers by 5 levels of rating in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, every section in the pie chart below shows
a sudden changes
Correct the article-noun agreement
sudden changes
a sudden change
show examples
between two different years.
Also
, satisfactory was the highest figure in 2005, after that, good choice became the most rated in 2010. at the same time, Excellent was the lowest in 2005. and edited to very poor in 2010.
To begin
with, the excellent part was 5 per cent in 2005. but, it's about six times higher than in 2010.
in addition
, the good grade started
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
14% and increased to 39% to
became
Wrong verb form
become
show examples
the highest rate in 2010.
Furthermore
, both poor and very poor departments decreased from 21% to 12% for poor.
while
very poor was 15% in 2005 and changed to 4% in 2010.
Moreover
, the
Replace the word
satisfaction
show examples
satisfactory
Replace the word
satisfaction
show examples
part was higher than others in the first year of
this
questionnaire. after 5 years. it decreased to 17%
Submitted by kalmah.sa20 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: