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The given bar graph shows fish and meat consumption of a pariticular country.

The given bar graph shows fish and meat consumption of a pariticular country.
The given line graph illustrates weekly meat and fish
consumption
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 per
person
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of
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in
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 a particular country from the year 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
while
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the
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apply
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beef and lamb
consumption
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 experienced a decline throughout the period, the
consumption
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 of chicken experienced an increase. Meanwhile, the
consumption
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 of fish was significantly lower than the
consumption
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 of meat, and
this
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consumption
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 experienced a slight decline throughout the period. In 1979, the
consumption
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 of chicken and lamb was 150
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gram
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grams
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 per
week
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 per
person
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while
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 throughout the period, the
consumption
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 of these two meats experienced an opposite trend. The weekly
consumption
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 of chicken experienced a gradual increase and reached roughly 250
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gram
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grams
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 per
person
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.
On the contrary
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, lamb
consumption
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 experienced a decrease and reached
at
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apply
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around 60
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gram
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grams
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per
person
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. Meanwhile, the
consumption
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 of beef experienced some fluctuations from 1979 to 1984, and
then
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, experienced a decline, and in 2004, it declined to around 100
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gram
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grams
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 per
week
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.
In addition
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, in 1979, the
consumption
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fish
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of fish
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 was around 50
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gram
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grams
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 per
week
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 per
person
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. In 2004, it
decrease
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decreased
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 to approximately 40
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gram
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grams
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 per
week
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 per
person
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, person, gram, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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