Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effect on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Movies and electronic
games
whether on
the
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mobile or
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computers have evolved with technology, better quality
of
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graphics, better scenarios and better gaming services. The issue with
todays
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world is the increase of simulation
games
or films that
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arround
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around
violence
(physical or mental), the following paragraphs we will discuss both. Most of the films and computer
games
that are violent are either based on historical events, tho some are taken to the extreme, or take place
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an imaginary world where the earth is invaded by aliens, and we need to get rid of them. In both cases, the harm, killing, and
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violence
are there,
regadless
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regardless
of the
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age, some parents will not
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the distraction is
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, exposing their children to endless massacres and blood baths; more over the immersive experience shifts the children reality and gives them a sense that ending ones life is ok and without consequences - morally or legally. The
depersonnalisation
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depersonalisation
personalisation
depersonalization
that takes place
while
sitting in front of a screen has turned many young ones into
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shooters, and we have heard so many
shoking
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shocking
and heartbreaking school shootings happening. We can still argue that the sales of the
games
and the movies are exponentially higher than the incidents
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and that not everyone that watches a movie or plays a game turns into a vicious,
blood seeking
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human being. That the films are harmless and the blame should be on the lack of parenting, or a genetic predisposition to be a
sociopathe
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sociopath
. In my honest and humble opinion,
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believe that
violence
portraied
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portrayed
in
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big screens should be
age limited
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, and the content less abusive and grim. We live in a dark reality filled with
violence
and horrible crimes and wars,
i
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would like to believe that screens should give us the opportunity to evade
this
reality and take our minds off of it, not reinforce it and
emplify
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amplify
simplify
it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • empathy
  • aggressive behavior
  • normalization of violence
  • explicit content
  • mature audiences
  • societal well-being
  • content restrictions
  • fictional violence
  • stress relief
  • personal consequences
  • outlet
  • pent-up emotions
  • censorship
  • freedom of expression
  • artistic expression
  • storytelling
  • parental guidance
  • negative impacts
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