The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart below depicts the weekly
income’s
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income
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distribution of families in one country on the various types of living things in 1968 and in 2018. At first glance, the vertical
collumn
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column
gives information about many things that
family
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the family
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spent on,
while
the
horrizontal
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horizontal
shows the percentage of weekly income.
Overall
,
food
in the past achieved the highest proportions, on which families spent most of their weekly income
while
five decades later, leisure surpassed any
types
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type
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to
achievd
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achieve
achieved
the highest position. In 1968,
food
was the
sources
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source
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of living
need
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needs
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which
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and
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most
of
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families spent almost all of their income. With 35%,
food
was much
more
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higher than the others, about seven times as much as the lowest thing, which is fuel and power. Other types of families’ spending including housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, household goods, personal goods, transport,
leisure
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and leisure
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reached virtually the same proportion with about 10
percents
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percent
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. Over the next 5 decades,
food
was still a high demand, but it was a bit lower than leisure activities. With over 20
percents
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percent
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, the entertainment activities surpassed
food
as well as
housing, about 5
percents
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percent
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higher than in the past. Transport
also
reached a much higher
percent
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percentage
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, about over 5
percents
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percent
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higher than in 1968. The others still remained low, and almost
unchange
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unchanged
with under 10
percents
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percent
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. It can be seen that people tend to improve their living by spending more on many activities and things that are
relevanted
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relevant
to relaxation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, percents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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