Write about the following topic: Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Health

is the most significant part

in

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our life. Having

health

problem

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problems

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can lead to many

issue

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issues

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for us.

However

, nowadays,

in

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with

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the

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globalization, more and more

inviduals

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individuals

with

health

problem

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problems

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believed

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in the method which is

used

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using

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the

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alternative

medicines

and

treatment

to save their

health

instead

of going to their usual and reliable

doctor

to

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for

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treat

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treatment

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.

On

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my view,

this

thinking

are

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wrong,

this

is a negative development.

To upon

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deeper analysis, people

are

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trying

alternative

medicine

and

treatment

can not know exactly about their

issue

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issues

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to have a suitable

treatment

.

Since

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,

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doctor

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Doctors

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who have an enormous knowledge

about

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science are reliable than any

medicine

or

treatments

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treatment

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. When visiting

doctor

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the doctor

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we can know more about the problems and the way to

treat

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treat them

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, but with only

an

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alternative

medicin

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medicine

and

treatment

we have no information about our

issue

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issues

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and don’t know how to

use

them.

For instance

, when my mom was young, she believed that her headache was not dangerous and she just

have

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a small

medicine

, but

in

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the next day, her head

become

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became

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really hurt and she

was go

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to her

dotor

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doctor

immediately

to

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treat

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treatment

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. After that occasion, all of her problems, she was

go

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to her

doctor

to have the best

solve

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solution

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. So,

this

is why we

not

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do not

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believe in

doctor

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doctors

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rather than any

medicine

or

treatment

.

In addition

,

alternative

medicines

and

treatments

have many

potentially dangerous

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potential dangers

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. As we don’t have any information about our problem

so

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the way we choose

method

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methods

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to solve

are

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not

safety

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. If we

not

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do not

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use

the right

medicine

and

treatment

suitable for our body, we will be in danger.

For example

, a patient in my

dad

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hospital, in the past

he

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apply

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used

an

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alternative

medicine

and

treatments

,

then

, he

need

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needed

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to go to

hospital

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the hospital

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to visit

doctor

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a doctor

the doctor

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to

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treat

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treatment

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.

This

situation was really dangerous. So that

why

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visiting

usual

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the usual

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doctor

is

more

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better than

use

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using

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medicines

and

treatment

by

ourselfs

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ourselves

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. In conclusion, in our modern era,

instead

of believing in

alternative

medicine

and

treatment

, we should choose to visit our usual

doctor

. The reason

are

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visiting

doctor

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a doctor

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help

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helps

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us to know more about our

issue

and the method to

treat

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treat it

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, to have a

safety

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safe

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way, so that we should believe in

reliable

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a reliable

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doctor

, spending time

to visit

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visiting

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doctor

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a doctor

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instead

of

use

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using

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any

alternative

medicines

and

treatments

which are not safe for our

health

.