Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, It is undeniable that we live in advance of

technology

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way

technology

improvement it

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also

improve

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how the way

people

communicate.

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, some

people

think that

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advances

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technology

bring

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some

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various

drawback

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impacts

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and impacts

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on society. I firmly assert that regardless of positive impacts,

technology

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a lot of disadvantages.

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essay will examine some drawbacks of

technology

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the comunication

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comunication

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communication

field.

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with,

technology

is playing a

crusial

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crucial

role in our daily life nowadays,

due to

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we are living in

technology

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era where all our activities

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and supported by

technology

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smartphone

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The smartphone

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is now very significant for individuals, where

phone

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phones

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now can use

a tools

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tools

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to support our daily

lifes

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, from

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paying

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transaction

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through

e-wallet

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communication

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to communication

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using messenger apps

such

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Whats app, Instagram, telegram and other social media.

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technology

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totaly

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totally

changed how the way

people

communicate.

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eventhough

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even though

technology

offer

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apply

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easy communication,

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fact

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created

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some

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various issues.

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technology

shapes

people

to be

individual

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individuals

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Instead

of meeting

people

personally, individuals prefer talking through online

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meetings

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such

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meeting

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, calling or texting.

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new habit will

creates

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a new character named 'individualism' which

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careless

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the careless

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character.

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, online communication can

reduse

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reduce

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the moral

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moral

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of society.

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due to

free

comunication

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communication

on social media,

people

have

their

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right to

comments

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about other content regardless

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of ages

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ages

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locations

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and

genders

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gender

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leading

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leads

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to personal

attacts

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attacks

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caused

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emotional abuse. In conclusion,

technology

have

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has

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crusial

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crucial

role in our daily life and

make

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makes

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our life easier,

however

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we can not

prevented

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be prevented

prevent

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that

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apply

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technology

bring some negative impacts

such

make

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making

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people

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individuals and can reduce

moral

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morale

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society.

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Topic Vocabulary:

face-to-face interactions
messaging apps
social media
non-verbal cues
family bonds
dependency
digital communication
superficial relationships
cyberbullying
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social isolation
virtual connections
emotional satisfaction
real-life interactions
technological intrusion

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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the histrory of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that students of all grades should be required to study physical education in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?