Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, It is undeniable that we live in advance of

technology

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way

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improvement it

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also

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improve

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how the way

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communicate.

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, some

people

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think that

advance

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technology

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bring

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some

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various

drawback

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impacts

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and impacts

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on society. I firmly assert that regardless of positive impacts,

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bring

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a lot of disadvantages.

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essay will examine some drawbacks of

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the comunication

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comunication

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communication

field.

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with,

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is playing a

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crucial

role in our daily life nowadays,

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due to

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we are living in

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technology

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a technology

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era where all our activities

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and supported by

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smartphone

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smartphones

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The smartphone

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is now very significant for individuals, where

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phones

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now can use

a tools

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tools

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to support our daily

lifes

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, from

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paying

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transaction

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through

e-wallet

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communication

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to communication

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using messenger apps

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Whats app, Instagram, telegram and other social media.

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technology

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totaly

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totally

changed how the way

people

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communicate.

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eventhough

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even though

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offer

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apply

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easy communication,

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fact

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created

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creates

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some

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various issues.

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technology

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shapes

people

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to be

individual

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individuals

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of meeting

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personally, individuals prefer talking through online

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such

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meeting

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, calling or texting.

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new habit will

creates

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a new character named 'individualism' which

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careless

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the careless

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character.

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, online communication can

reduse

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reduce

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moral

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of society.

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due to

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free

comunication

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communication

on social media,

people

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have

their

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right to

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about other content regardless

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of ages

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ages

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locations

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and

genders

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, with somehow

leading

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to personal

attacts

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attacks

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causes

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emotional abuse. In conclusion,

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have

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crusial

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crucial

role in our daily life and

make

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makes

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our life easier,

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however

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we can not

prevented

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that

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apply

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technology

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bring some negative impacts

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make

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making

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people

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individuals and can reduce

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morale

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society.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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280 words

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face-to-face interactions
messaging apps
social media
non-verbal cues
family bonds
dependency
digital communication
superficial relationships
cyberbullying
online harassment
social isolation
virtual connections
emotional satisfaction
real-life interactions
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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

People in major cities suffer from high levels of air pollution, causing health problems for many. What are the main reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?