Some people believe that by killing someone society is also making a crime, so, that why death penalty should be forbidden. Life in prison would be a better punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

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The crime rate is increasing day by day

due to

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various reasons.Few people

says

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that killing a

person

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is one of the major immorality in the community.

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,death

penality

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is prohibited in some countries.So,some

human

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humans

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believe that life in jail is a suitable

punishment

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for criminals.I totally agree with the statement that providing prison life is a better option for

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this

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issues

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.In

this

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essay,

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will elaborate

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opinion in detail.

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with, the

person

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who

engaged

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in lawbreaking activities

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the tendency to do the same involvement in the future.

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,the

punishment

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guard

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house is vital to cease the different kinds of

corruptions

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,it will help to protect the society from the offenders.

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that,a

person

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can stay safe without any security or

harrasement

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harassment

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,In India, the individual who

commited

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committed

the criminality

have

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the mulct from 6 to 60 years.

This

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type of castigation is highly

benefical

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beneficial

for our society to prevent

the

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apply

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repeated crimes. Another reason is to provide

the

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rehabilitation

as well as

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counselling

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at lock-up to block the cruel activities towards the community.It will help to change the

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behavioural

behavourial

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behavioural

pattern of a

person

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people

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for people

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who

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done

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the

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crime,

punishment

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will make them

to remind

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remember

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to avoid

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apply

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repeatitions

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repetitions

repetition

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this

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types

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type

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of method is

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best solution for

this

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problem. In summary,killing someone is a common

conerns

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concern

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among

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society.

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, it can

be prevent

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by giving proper

punishment

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jail is

easiest

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method.I believe that some methods like

rehabilitaion

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rehabilitation

,counselling and involvement in other activities at penal

institution

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institutions

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make them aware to

aviod

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avoid

to do repeated criminal activity.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Some people believe that by killing someone society is also making a crime, so, that why death penalty should be forbidden. Life in prison would be a better punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

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