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Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 report showed a bar graph that demonstrates
a
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 best transportation method
in
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for
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adult
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adults
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 in certain places
such
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 as
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UK
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the UK
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,
USA
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the USA
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,
France
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 and Italy. On general inspection, we notice that
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car driving is taking the highest rate among all
ther
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the
 ways of transportations in all countries except
France
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.
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, the percentage of utilizing the
motocycle
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motorcycle
 and bicycle between all cities are varying.
First,
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the
UK
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 and
United
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the United
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states
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are sharing
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 the same number
in
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of
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 car
driving
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 which is 60%.
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Furthermore
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the
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motorcycle use in The
UK
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 is
signficantly
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significantly
 low
comparing
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compared
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 to vehicles
by
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with
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50
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a 50
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% difference. Unlike
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the united
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united
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United States
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states
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states,
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 they are using
the
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 more than the
UK
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 by 20% for the US.
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, Italy represents the highest rate of using cars when
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it
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to
France
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 by more than 40%.
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this
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point
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point,
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 we can observe that
France
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 takes the lead in bicycle riding by 45%.
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, motocycle in
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france
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 and Italy are sharing the same rate roundabout 10%.
Finally
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,
France
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 advances Italy in bicycle riding by about 30%
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