The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph provides the total
foreigners
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number of foreigners
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who visited the three places in a European country in 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of
oversea
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overseas
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visitors
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to the lakes and the
coast
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increased quite steeply,
while
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those who came to the
mountains
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saw a modest increase. Looking in more detail, in 1987, the
coast
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had approximately 40,000
visitors
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compared to 20,000 for the
mountains
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and 10,000 for the lakes.
However
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, after 5 years, the number of people who travelled to the
coast
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decreased slightly to 35,000, but
rebounding
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rebounded
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during the rest of the period, reaching 75,000 people in 2007.
On the other hand
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, from 1987 to 1997, the portion of foreigners who travelled to the
mountains
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climbed insignificantly, with a 10,000 increase.
This
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was followed by a minor upward of 500 more
visitors
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in 2007.
In contrast
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, the lakes's
visitors
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soared beginning in 1997, reaching a total of 40,000 after surpassing the
mountains
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'
visitors
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in 1992.
Moreover
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,
this
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figure continued to climb, overtaking the
coast
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and reaching a peak of 75,000 in 2002, before dropping
quitely
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quite
in 2007 to 50,000 people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, coast, mountains with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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