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The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutirents, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutirents, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The given pie charts provide
the
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apply
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information regarding three
type
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types
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 of
ingredents
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ingredients
that is
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar which may have
negative
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a negative
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 impact on
people
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people's
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 health if they
consumes
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consume
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 more than
normal
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the normal
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 amount. It is described by the chart that the similar percentage of
sodium
 taken by the consumers in breakfast and snacks
14
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is 14
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%.
In contrast
 to saturated fat
near
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nearly
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 about two fifth (37%)
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of nutirents
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nutirents
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nutrients
eaten
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are eaten
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in
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at
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dinner
follwed
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followed
 by 21% in snacks and 26
percent
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per cent
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 in lunch as well.
While
,
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apply
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 more than
two fifth
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two-fifth
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 added sugar was consumed in snacks by
population
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the population
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 characterized by 23% in
dinner
 and
near
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nearly
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 about a fifth
percent
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per cent
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 in lunch.
Moreover
, alike saturated fat and added sugar
ingested
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are ingested
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 in
braekfast
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breakfast
.
Hence
,
large
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a large
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 proportion of
sodium
 was swallowed in
dinner
such
 as 43%.
overall
,
majority
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the majority
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 of
nutirents
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nutrients
 were eaten
in
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for
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dinner
instead
 of others.
Whereas
, the lowest proportion can
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be seem
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seem
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seen
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 in breakfast of
sodium
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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