WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the average proportion of
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
in typically everyday dishes in the United States, which are
these
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nutrients
might
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that might
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be unhealthy
,
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if
it
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eaten excessively.
Overall
, the highest
percentage
of
sodium
and saturated fat
found
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is found
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mostly in dinner
meals
,
while
snacks have a huge
amount
of added
sugar
. Breakfast and lunch
meals
have
all
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nearly the same
amount
of three nutrients.
Initially
, dinner
meals
have the largest
percentage
of
sodium
and saturated fat among other dishes with 43 per cent and 37 per cent respectively, whilst
have
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having
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23 per cent of
sugar
added. Snacks have a significant number of added
sugar
nearly 42%
and
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an
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amount
of fat at 21% and
small
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a small
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percentage
of
sodium
which is 14%.
Secondly
, lunch
meals
have almost the same
amount
of
sodium
and fat which are 29%
sodium
and 26% fat, meanwhile having 19% of added
sugar
. For
breakfast
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breakfast,
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it is discovered that all three nutrients have the same
percentage
16% for
sodium
and added
sugar
, and 14% for
sodium
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percentage, meals, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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