The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
bar chart illustrates the labor force
employemnet
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employment
of
USA
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the USA
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from 1930 to 2010. There were mentioned five sectors
which
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in which
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employees worked.
Overall
,
farming
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the farming
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,fishing and foresting
sector
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sectors
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sharply declined
while
other categories were
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increased
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. Specially technical and industrial sections notably increase from 1970.
Initially
, farming fishing and foresting reached a peak of 80% but it
was
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sharply declined in 1980 and
end
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of the 2010 which
was
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declined
0
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to 0
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. Industrial and technical
employement
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employment
remain
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constant both categories gradually increased and it
was
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peaked
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peak 35% by 2010. Sales and office
flucations
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fluctuations
locations
all over the year.Beginning of the year, other services
were
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dropped slightly but middle of the year
which was
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they
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remain
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remained
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constant.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • service sector
  • figures
  • percentages
  • trends
  • decreasing trend
  • increasing trend
  • significant growth
  • considerable decline
  • expansion
  • analyze
  • observations
  • key periods
  • transitions
  • conclusion
  • economy
  • shifted focus
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