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Band 4.5

A company has asked for permission from the local Council to built a factory in your area. Write a letter to the local Council stating that you and your neighbours think this is a bad idea. State what problem this might cause Explain where the factory should be constructed Explain what you want the Council to Do

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Jatinder Kaur and
i m
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 living
in
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 115
oak street
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, london
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london
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London
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. I am going to express the concerns
how
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about how
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 constructing the new factory would be
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bad for the people who
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over
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there for a long time. The new factory is going to
built
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in
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next month in our residential area. I think constructing
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the new building may
be creates
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 new problems for
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society . There will be a lot of noise level
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 that people may face hearing
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problem,
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 everyone knows a lot of noise pollution is
emerged
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 from the factories.
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, air pollution
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 land pollution may be generated because of
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it. Society may
be faced
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 health risks as it
creates
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a
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emit
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 gases. I would like the local council should think one more on the decision which is made by them before starting
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the work.
Furthermore
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factory
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 can be made by them in
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which
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where
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do
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 not
living
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.
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 hope you will try to listen
our
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 voice and action will be taken from your side. With regards, Jatinder Kaur.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs have one main idea each.
task achievement
Use clear sentences to express your concerns in a stronger way.
task achievement
You clearly stated your concerns about the factory.
coherence and cohesion
You used a polite greeting and closing in your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • permission
  • local Council
  • factory
  • community
  • problems
  • solution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • traffic congestion
  • safety risks
  • environmental impacts
  • contamination
  • wildlife
  • health standards
  • property values
  • industrial zone
  • residential areas
  • sustainable development
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