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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The bar chart compares the information about the proportion of people who consumed five pieces of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 each day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
women
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the women
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accounted for the highest
presentage
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percentage
 who consumed
the
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fruit
 and
vegetables
 in
period
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a period
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 of
year
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the year
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,
whereas
children
ate
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who ate
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vegetables
 witnessed
the
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a
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 small
rate
 compared to
men
 and
women
. As the graph shows, consumed
fruit
 and
vegetables
 by
men
 experienced exactly the same
rate
 around 17% between 2001 and 2003
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compared
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 to only about 13% of
ate for
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children
 over the same year. The percentage of
men
consumed
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who consumed
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 food slightly
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 in
over
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the
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2004 and 2006 from 22% to 28% respectively,
whereas
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the figure
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figure
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figures
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 for
children
 were nearly 18% and 24%.
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 in 2007 and
2008
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2008,
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men
 witnessed nearly the same proportion
with
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children
were
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approximately 25%.
By contrast
,
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the women
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women
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women's
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rate
 accounted for the highest proportion until 2006.
Women
 consumed
fruit
 and
vegetables
 started at 23% in 2001,
while
 it
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increased
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 over the 5 years with reached a peak
35
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of 35
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% in 2006.
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addition
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these
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this rate
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rate
 saw
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a slightly
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slightly
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 decrease over the period from 32% and 30% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, vegetables, women, children, rate, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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