It’s important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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There is no doubt that
children
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should learn basic moral and core values at the start of their lives. As we all know, there are many ways of teaching
children
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as positive reinforcement and
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, but some people believe that
punishment
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is essential for
children
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to learn effectively. In
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punishment
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Firstly
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, I think
punishment
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is essential for
children
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to learn because there is
punishment
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in the adult world as well when grown-ups have done something wrong,
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, there would be fines or even going to prison if you break the law.
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, I think
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to understand and
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fit in the world around them when they are little, to understand that there would be consequences if they have done something wrong.
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I agree that
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is necessary in modelling
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’s good
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, I don’t agree with
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that’s hurting
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children
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physically,
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as hitting them or starving them for a long period of time. To illustrate, time out is a good way of letting
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know that their
behaviour
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at the moment is beyond the rules,
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, when several
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are playing together and one of the
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started
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hitting or snitching
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children
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’s toys, supervising adults should teach them not to hit or snitch and the concept of sharing and taking turns,
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, if the child got too heated and continued the unacceptable
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, I would suggest to take the child away from the group and have some time-out for them to calm down and to understand that there is a consequence of their undesired
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,
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I think that
punishment
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is essential in letting
children
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know what is right or wrong, it is not the only way. Other forms of teaching
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as giving positive feedback,
praising
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and praising
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and rewarding
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are
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effectively
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way
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for
children
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to learn.
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