Some people think that parents have an powerful influence in child's life, while the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part of child's development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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vary
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opinion
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that which factor is more powerful to influence in child's life. Some
people
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suggest that
parents
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have
significant
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while
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other
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believe that influence from outside family plays
more
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a more

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important role. In my opinion,
parents
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is
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are

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vital to
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children
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children
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chindren
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children
development compared to other factors, The first reason is that
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have
a
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impact
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for
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on

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child 's
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a child 's

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value.
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are the first
teacher
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teachers

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of
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and their education style and moral
value
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values

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will affect
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children
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children's

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behavious
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.
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,
children
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start
modifing
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their
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parents
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parent's
parents'

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behavious
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behaviours
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since
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when

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they are
baby
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babies

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.
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, rules set by
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which
children
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need to follow let
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to
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the right things and wrong things. The second reason is the family help
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develop their
talent
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talents

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.
Warm
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family environment is the
basic
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basis

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of
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children
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children's

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development and it is
benefit
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for
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children
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children's

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study
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studying

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ability and social
skill
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skills

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. If the family
member
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members

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always support each other, the
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will be brave and confident even in some difficult
time
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times

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because they know they are not alone and family will always
behind
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them.
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, many
parents
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will provide resources and opportunities for their
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, like
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their
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go to
the
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extra-curriculum classes or some interest groups to help
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develop their
hobby
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hobbies

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which
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is improtant
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is improtant

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important
in young
peple
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people

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growth.
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these classes,
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also
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can improve their
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in cooperation and
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with their peers. Some factors outside
home
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such
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as school,
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may
impact
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children
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growth but they are not the main factor and
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for
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a shorter time.
Parents
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accompany
with
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their
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since their
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born
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.
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, good and responsible
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can help
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well
perpared
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prepared

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for the pressure and challenge from
outside
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environment. In conclusion, I suppose that
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have
more
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powerful
impact
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for
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on

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children
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and provide a
foundemental
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basis for
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people
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future growth.

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