Some people think that parents have an powerful influence in child's life, while the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part of child's development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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opinions
people
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a significant
impact
while
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children
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values
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.
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behaviours
behaviour
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, children
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modifying
parents
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parent's
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when
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, rules set by parents
which children
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to
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children
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members
children
will be brave and confident even in some difficult time
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times
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, many parents
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letting
children
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children
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important
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people
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children
also
can improve their capatity
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capacity
collbroation
with their peers.
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collaboration
home
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the home
such
as school, commiunty
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impact
children
growth but they are not the main factor and Change noun form
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contribute
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children
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, good and responsible parents
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prepared
outside
environment.
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