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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts represent the
inforamtion
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information
of
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of revenue
sevices
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services
 and expenses in the
united states
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United States
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 in
same
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the same
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 year.
Firstly
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, the largest proportion is covered by donated food
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that
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 is 86.6% in the left side chart followed by 10.4%
society
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 involvement and program revenue is 2.2 per cent.
Moreover
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, investment money and politics deposit
is
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 being provided in
similar
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 amount and 0.4% seems in other income as well.
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, in expenditures the significant area is being covered by program sources
such
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 as 95.8 % characterized by fundraising
2.6
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 per cent and only
paticipation
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participation
 of management and general is 1.6%.
overall
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,
in
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on
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 both sides the noticeable area of contribution to donated food and
programe
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programme
 service,
while
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 a minimal is being given by government grants and investment income.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • children's charity
  • expenditure
  • income
  • donations
  • individuals
  • corporations
  • government grants
  • administrative costs
  • fundraising activities
  • direct aid
  • disparities
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • balance
  • implications
  • operations
  • future focus
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