Some peoplebelieve that the difference between the lowest paid jobs and the highest paid jobs should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is
essentail
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essential
that every employee should be paid for their labour
accordingly
. There is a wide belief by some
individual
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concerning the rate difference in low and high payment employees get, and that it should be minimized in order to merge the difference. I disagree with
this
statement to some extent, because not all jobs are equal, and
i
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am of the opinion that salary should be based on
hours
of work, and the type of job involved,
therefore
, my reasons
are discuss
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further
below.
Firstly
, there is no dispute that some differences set by various
campanies
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companies
can be obvious to the common man.
therefore
, it is crucial to note what the work entails,
such
as the time of composition of the employee.
for instance
, hospital
shifts
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standard working
hours
in
ireland
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is consider
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37.5
hours
weekly,
while
same
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the same
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position and role in
malta
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Malta
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40
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hours
per week. Even though both settings
are consider
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same
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the same
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for
full time
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workers, it is not expected that the payment should be
thesame
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the same
.
Secondly
, the nature of the job is
paramout
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paramount
in regards to income, for some labour which
are
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hazardeous
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hazardous
, a
significant
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significantly
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higher income can be expected.
for example
,
a
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apply
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factory work which
involve
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physical and mental
vigourous
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vigorous
activities should not
payed
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be paid
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as a hotel receptionist whose job only
contain
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contains
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minimal energy. In conclusion,
while
it is important for companies and organizations to maintain
and
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an
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average pay scale
within
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individuals, it is
also
required to consider the
extend
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of jobs and time duration involved in various
employments
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employment
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sections.
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