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The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.

The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.
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The line graph provides information about how much travellers in Australia, the USA, the UK, Japan and China spent
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 New Zealand from 1996 to 2014
Overall
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, the figures for spending in Australia,
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and China increased significantly over the period of 18 years and Australia spent most in 6 countries ,
however
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 Japanese people spent
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the same expense in 1996 and 2014. Australian citizens just spent roughly 1000
NZS
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 for travelling to New Zealand in 1996,
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 the expense witnessed a significant rise in 2006 at approximately 2500
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 which was its highest point and fluctuated for the 2006-2014 period. There was a moderate decline in spending money to travel to New Zealand at 200
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 in 20014. The amount of expense in the US, China and Japan went up to 1800
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, 500
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 and 1200
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 respectively in 2010, 2004 and 2002 respectively.
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, the expenditure in the UK decreased significantly in 2002 at 250
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,
then
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 increased sharply to 1000
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 in 2014

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nzs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • visitor spend
  • over a period of
  • eighteen years
  • between 1996 and 2014
  • general trend
  • observed
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuations
  • a breakdown of
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • highest spenders
  • lowest spenders
  • possible reasons
  • economic conditions
  • tourism promotions
  • significant events
  • specific significant peaks
  • drops in spending
  • corresponding years
  • impact of external factors
  • global financial crisis
  • natural disasters
  • summarizing
  • overall trend
  • implications
  • tourism industry
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