The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of

 the site.
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The given maps provide detailed information about the current
building-structure
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in an industrial area in the city of Norbiton
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and its structured advancements in future.
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current site is projected to be reconstructed from an industrial area to a residential one with several new houses and essential facilities for the convenience of residents
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the the latter layout. Taken together, currently, a range of factories are located in the south part of the river,
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to
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farmland. Some manufacturing plants surround the roundabout which connects to the two sections of
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: to the southern main road and to the eastern side of the site. On closer examination
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the second layout, the road infrastructure is to be developed and broadened by having
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increase in the number of streets and roundabouts, which will
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connect to the northern farming fields.
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, a number of apartments are set to be built both by replacing the existing buildings and constructing new ones. Inhabitants will be provided with all the vital services,
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as markets,
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, medical
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clinics
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and
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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