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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average monthly
temperatures
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 in
Paris
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, Dubai, and Sydney.
Overall
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,
while
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 the average
temperatures
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 in
Paris
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 and Sydney fluctuate throughout the year, the
temperatures
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 in Dubai remain consistently higher than in
Paris
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 and show a slight
overall
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 increase over 12 months. In Dubai,
temperatures
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 rise significantly from January to August, peaking at over 35
°C
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, before dropping sharply to approximately 25
°C
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 by December.
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,
Paris
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 experiences fluctuations in average
temperatures
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 throughout the year.
Temperatures
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 climb steadily, reaching around 20
°C
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 in July and August, before falling significantly to about 5
°C
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 in December.
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, Sydney follows an opposite trend.
Temperatures
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 decrease notably from January, reaching their lowest point at approximately 15
°C
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 in July. From there, they rise steadily to about 22
°C
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 by December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, paris, °c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • major cities
  • trends
  • temperature changes
  • comparisons
  • yearly pattern
  • geographical location
  • climate zones
  • significant variations
  • notable differences
  • peak temperatures
  • lowest temperatures
  • fluctuations
  • seasonal changes
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