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the pie chart below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the pie chart below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data in pie charts demonstrates the various languages speaking people in canada every decades starting from 1996 till 2016 for the period of 30 years.
overall
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, it can be seen clearly that, english speaker is higher in all these years.
while
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on the other hand
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 non official languages native speakers is increasing with the increasing
rate
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 in the given periods
whereas
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, french speakers are decreasing at decreasing
rate
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. English language is highly spoken as it is almost 2/3 in the
year
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 1996.
whereas
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, in the
year
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 2006 it has quite decreased to 58
percentage
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 followed by 57
percentage
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 in 2016.
Additionally
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, non official language speaker is increasing at a slow
rate
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 as it is 17
percentage
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 in the
year
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 1996 and 20
percentage
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 in 2006
also
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 22
percentage
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 in the
year
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 2016.
Furthermore
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, french native is decreasing at a
rate
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 of 1
percentage
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 in every decade. As it was 23
percentage
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 in 1996 with one
percentage
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 decrease it was 22
percentage
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 in the
year
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 2006 again with same
percentage
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 of decrease it was 21
percentage
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 in the
year
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 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, year, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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