The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. 

Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
chart shows the
energy
consumption in the US and the
Uk
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UK
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in the years 2000 and 2006, On the vertical Axes It shows The percentile of
usage
up to 40%, And On the horizontal
axes
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axes,
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it shows the different kinds of
energy
and power
sources
being used, including
non renewable
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non-renewable
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and renewable
sources
. In the year
2000
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2000,
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both countries were much more dependent on oil and coal and less on gas, nuclear power, and other renewable
sources
of
energy
. Especially the USA, which exceeds the
UK
in both oil and coal
usage
, But falls back on gas and renewable
sources
which the
UK
slightly expelled at. In the year
2006
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2006,
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The
usage
of oil
is
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still increasing, but
instead
of relying on coal, both countries witnessed a surge in gas
usage
as technology continued to get more innovative, and that caused a huge plummet in coal
usage
, and the
UK
has
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increased their nuclear power and renewable
energy
usage
unlike
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, unlike
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The US where it actually decreased slightly in the
last
6 years since 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, uk, usage, sources with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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