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The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 chart shows the
energy
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 consumption in the US and the
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Uk
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UK
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 in the years 2000 and 2006, On the vertical Axes It shows The percentile of
usage
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 up to 40%, And On the horizontal
axes
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axes,
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 it shows the different kinds of
energy
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 and power
sources
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 being used, including
non renewable
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non-renewable
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 and renewable
sources
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. In the year
2000
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2000,
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 both countries were much more dependent on oil and coal and less on gas, nuclear power, and other renewable
sources
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 of
energy
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. Especially the USA, which exceeds the
UK
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 in both oil and coal
usage
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, But falls back on gas and renewable
sources
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 which the
UK
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 slightly expelled at. In the year
2006
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2006,
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 The
usage
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 of oil
is
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was
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 still increasing, but
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 of relying on coal, both countries witnessed a surge in gas
usage
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 as technology continued to get more innovative, and that caused a huge plummet in coal
usage
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, and the
UK
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has
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apply
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increased their nuclear power and renewable
energy
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usage
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unlike
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, unlike
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 The US where it actually decreased slightly in the
last
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 6 years since 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, uk, usage, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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