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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
The graph and chart show the duration of immigrants intended to stay in the
UK
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 and their motivations between 2000 to 2008.
Overall
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, most
people
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 planned to stay for up to 2
years
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 throughout the given period, with the most significant amount of
people
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 relocating to the
UK
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 for a job.
Initially
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, around 150 newcomers in the
UK
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 mostly planned to reside for 4 or more
years
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 and up to 2
years
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, with only a small number of 50
people
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 wanting to stay for 2 to 4
years
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.
However
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, the trend for
individuals
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 who expected to stay for 4 or more
years
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 remained stable until 2008. Meanwhile, in 2002, the trend of
people
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 that wanted to settle for up to 2
years
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 started to increase by 50 thousand each year until 2004, where after that, the number stayed at around 250 until the end of the given period,
while
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individuals
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 who expected to stay for 2-4
years
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 remained unchanged by around 50 thousand until slightly increased to 100,000 persons. In 2008, 38% of outsiders inhabited the
UK
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 for employment
reasons
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, making it the biggest share among other
reasons
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, followed closely by
individuals
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 who stayed for educational purposes at 32%.
Whereas
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people
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 with the intention to coexist with their family comprised 16%.
Moreover
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, only 7% represented other
reasons
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, similar to
individuals
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 who did not state their
reasons
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, years, individuals, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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