The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

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people in the 18 to 25 age in

canada

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Canada

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use to watch Television in two different years.

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, it is clear from the diagram that the conventional

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witnessed the most decline

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all devices in 2019. On the opposite side, mobile phones and flat-screen

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TV had

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increased

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the

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double in 2019.

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, Tablet usage shows

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difference in 2019 in comparison with 2009. The percentage of conventional

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in 2009 was 34%,

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decreased to 4%. The highest jump

flat-screen

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in flat-screen

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was 8% in 2009, in 10 years

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it had reached 27%. Tablet had increased over the triple, it was 5% in 2009 and hit 19% in 2019.

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, few devices

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roughly the same between the two years

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Laptop

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and desktop computer. In 2009, people aged 18 to 25 in

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Canada

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prefer

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watching

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in conventional

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, In 2019 conventional

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almost disappeared and

replaced

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by flat-screen

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TVs

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and mobile phones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

167 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

illustrate
gadgets
utilized
age categories
watching TV channels
comparison
popularity
notable trends
increase/decrease
devices
decade
advancements in technology
user preferences
speculation
future trends
conclusion
implications
technology and media companies
lifestyle
habits
target age group

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The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job