The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent
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The two line charts below illustrate the percentage of males and females who are aged between 60-64 who were employed in Belgium, the USA, Japan and Australia in different two years.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the
men
's percentage in each country and year is over the women's percentage.
While
in Belgium the female employees are roughly none. There is a big difference between the
men
's
job
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in Belgium, in 1970 it was 79% and after 30 years it decreased to around 60%.
Moreover
, In the USA the number of
men
employed was mostly the same. But in comparison with women's employment in the USA
men
are double. Japan was approximately the same in spite of the years, The
men
employees were 85% in 1970.
In addition
, in the same
year
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women's employment was 43%.
Whereas
the Australian
men
who had a job in 1970 were 76%, and 47% in 2000.
Furthermore
, it is the halving in
female's
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employment.
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