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The line graph illustrates the consumption of fish and various types of meat in grams per person per week in a European country over the period from 1979 to 2004.

The line graph illustrates the consumption of fish and various types of meat in grams per person per week in a European country over the period from 1979 to 2004.
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The line graph provides information about how much one
person
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consums
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consumes
consume
chicken
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,
beef
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, lamb and
fish
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 in a European nation every
week
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 between 1979 and 2004.
Overall
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, The
consumption
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 of
beef
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, lamb and
fish
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 has a
smiliar
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similar
 trend in
term
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 of a general decrease ,
while
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 the figures for
chicken
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increase
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 significantly over the period of 25 years.
Fish
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 eaten by one
person
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 per
week
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 was around 70
grams
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 in 1979 and it was clearly seen that the figures for
fish
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consumption
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 remained steady for the 80-year period. The amount of
beef
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 and lamb consumed by one European
person
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 in 1979 was approximately 220
grams
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, exactly 150
grams
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 per
week
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 respectively. The
consumption
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 of
beef
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 dropped to roughly 180
grams
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 from 1979 to 1981 before reaching the highest point of the whole line graph 240
grams
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 in 1984 .
In contrast
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, a
person
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 in a European country ate 140
grams
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 of
chicken
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 per
week
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 ,
then
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 the amount of
consumption
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for
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of
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chicken
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 reached
to
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apply
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exactly 250
grams
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 per
week
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 in 2004

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, chicken, beef, fish, week, consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • grams per person per week
  • European country
  • over the period
  • trend
  • popularity
  • shifts
  • influenced
  • health trends
  • economic changes
  • availability
  • noteworthy fluctuations
  • patterns
  • significant rises
  • falls
  • cultural influences
  • societal influences
  • dietary preferences
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