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Band 4.5

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports center. In your letter: describe what the problem with the changing rooms is say what happened the last time you complained explain what you want the manager to do.

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Dear sir Hope you are doing well. I would like you to
have
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 some attention
regarding
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 the dressing room in the sports centre .These
room
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rooms
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 are not enough spacious .
Along with
 that it
doesnot
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does not
 have proper locks.
Additionally
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 the lighting system is inappropriate .Students have been
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struggling
strugling
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struggling
 with
this
 problem The
last
 time
i
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 complained about all these
problem
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problems
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 but nothing was done regarding these issues. I request you to pay some attention
on
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this
 topic and I humbly request you to
imporve
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improve
condition
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 of all the changing rooms .
Your
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 faithfully Aman Saini
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task achievement
Include more specific examples or details to strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Check for minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Clear statement of the problem and a polite request for action.
coherence cohesion
Polite and appropriate greeting and closing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inadequate
  • unsanitary
  • persistent
  • maintenance
  • rectify
  • detrimental
  • substandard
  • facilities
  • insufficient
  • conducive
  • prompt attention
  • feedback
  • complaint escalation
  • sanitation
  • renovation
  • urgent priority
  • responsive action
  • immediate resolution
  • implement changes
  • customer satisfaction
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