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The table illustrates the proportion of people aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and the UK in 1988, 2000 and an estimation of 2030.

The table illustrates the proportion of people aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and the UK in 1988, 2000 and an estimation of 2030.
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The table provides information about the
percentage
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 of citizens aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and the
UK
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 in 1988, 2000 and the estimated proportion
of
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in
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 2030.
Overall
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, Germany is
a
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the
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 country with the highest
percentage
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 of
people
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 aged 65 and over for 3 years,
whereas
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people
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 reached 65 and over in the
UK
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 had the lowest proportion in 1988, 2000 and 2030. The figures for citizens who were aged 65 and over in the
UK
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 accounted for 20% and 25% in 1988 and 2000 respectively. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 aged 65 and over was estimated
30
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at 30
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% in 2030 which was the highest
percentage
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 in the table. Canada was a nation
which had
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where
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 the proportion of citizens reached
to
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apply
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65 and over in 1988, 2000,
2030
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and 2030
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 at 16%, 21% and 26 % respectively.
people
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 in the
UK
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 had the lowest rate for 3 years compared with other nations 14% in 1988

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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