The diagram below shows a simple system that turns dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the process of turning dirty

water

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into filtered

water

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, the operation of filtering the

water

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is done by a

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water-filter

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water filter

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assenbly

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assembly

and through

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apply

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basic simple steps.

Intitially

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Initially

, the dirty

water

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is poured into a special plastic barrel that

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is coverd

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coverd

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covered

storage

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a storage

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drum.

This

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blastic

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plastic

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barrel consists of three layers, the first layer and the largest one is sand, the intermediate layer is charcoal, and the final one is gravel.

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, there is a plastic lid covering

this

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tank. After a period of time, the

water

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separated from its dust and impurities, and it

accumlate

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accumulated

into the upper

serface

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surface

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storage drum. After that, the filtered ware is

being

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apply

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transferred into another storage drum by a tube, which is connected between

these barrel

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this barrel

these barrels

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. Ultimately, the

water

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are

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ready to drink.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

135 words

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Diagram
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Dirty water
Clean water
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Output
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