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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the daily consumption of three primary foods (
wheat
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,
maize
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, and
rice
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) consumed by individuals in four distinct countries (Cambodia,
Poland
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, Egypt, and Mexico).
Overall
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, all four states have a diverse range of their daily preferred meals.
Rice
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 is popular among Cambodians,
while
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Maize
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favoured
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 by Mexicans.
Similarly
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, people in
Poland
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 and Egypt usually include
wheat
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 in their daily diet. It can be seen that
rice
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 is the most popular source of energy in Cambodia, with a total consumption of 1445 Cal each
day
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, meanwhile, people in
Poland
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 and Egypt favour
wheat
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 among the other meals, with the former making up 865
Calories
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 of
wheat
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 per
day
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, and the latter are 1095
Calories
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.
Conversely
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, Mexican people normally eat a lot of
Maize
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, with it being consumed by 1083
calories
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 per
day
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.
On the other hand
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, the Cambodian population rarely eat
wheat
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 in their dietary routine, as it only makes up 18 Cal,
whereas
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Maize
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 is slightly more favoured since they normally consume 103
calories
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 each
day
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.
Moreover
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, the population in
Poland
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 did not enjoy
rice
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 and
maize
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, with both only consuming 19
calories
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 and 0
Calories
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, respectively. Meanwhile, Egyptians sometimes like to eat
rice
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 with an average of 501
calories
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 and
maize
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, with an average of 578
Calories
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.
Finally
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, individuals in Mexico rarely eat
rice
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 (57 Cal each
day
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),
although
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wheat
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 (275 Cal per
day
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) is somewhat
slightly
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apply
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popular.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, maize, rice, poland, day, calories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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