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the chart below give information about world spending and population. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below give information about world spending and population. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
chart
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 on the left shows data about the amount of money which is spent on various things globally and the other
chart
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 illustrates the data about how many people live
in
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on
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 5 different
continent
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continents
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 around the world.
Overall
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, what stands out from the first
chart
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 is that food
beside of
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besides
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 other categories
are
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the most
things
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 to spend on,
while
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 it can be seen from the right
chart
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 that the
mejarity
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majority
 of people live in Asia. If we look at the details on the world spending
chart
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, it is
noticable
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noticeable
 that two-fifth of the whole
spenditure
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expenditure
 was on
other
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, the second place on the list is food with 24%, with a considerable difference
comparing
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compared
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 to the first place. Transport and housing come
next,
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with 18% and 12% respectively. At the bottom of the list is clothing with only 6 of the
spenditures
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expenditures
. Regarding the world population
chart
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, with a huge difference, Asia has more than
a
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half of the population, which is the most crowded,
whereas
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 the second place is for both Europe and
Americas
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the Americas
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 with 14%, being tied at
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 rank. The second
least
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lowest
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 number of people is in Africa
by
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10%, and
other
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the other
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 is ranked the
last
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 with just 5%.the
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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