The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how Australians use
energy
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and the amount of greenhouse gases they emit
as a result
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.
Overall
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, there are 6 groups of power utilization in Australia. To start with, almost half of it is needed for heating, and,
additionally
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, the third is made up of water heating. Other household activities represent much less
energy
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.
For example
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, other appliances contribute to 15% of
overall
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energy
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consumption, which is only half of the water heating part. The lowest proportions are refrigeration, lighting, and cooling, with 7%, 4% and 2% respectively. As for the second chart, it can be seen that water heating contributes to global warming mostly, and the percentage is just above 30. Interestingly, the second place is taken by other appliances, with 28%,
while
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Australians consume only 15% of
overall
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power on them. Heating and refrigeration make up almost the same proportions, at around 15% each. Logically, lighting and cooling emit insufficient amounts of carbon dioxide, only 8% and 3%, respectively, as not so much
energy
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in the households spent on them. In conclusion, I would like to emphasize the fact that there is a tendency for higher greenhouse gas emissions from appliances with high
energy
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consumption.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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