The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts

demonstrates

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the percentage of holidaymakers of specific

region

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regions

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staying in different types of locations in these three years ,

such

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as 1988 , 1998 ,

2008

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and 2008

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, there are four different accommodations,

such

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as rented apartments, camping , hotels ,

staying

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and staying

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with family and friends. The highest result illustrated

option

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the option

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staying

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of staying

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with family and friends in these three specific periods . But , the fewest result was rented apartments only in two years

then

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became higher than it was . 1988 and 1998 are similar in some kinds of locations where people chose to stay.

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, rented apartments were the least used place in two decades .

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, the highest result was staying at home with family members

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apply

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. In 1988 it was 52%

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increased to 54%, there is no big difference between them.

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, these years have more similar results than 2008 . In 2008 , a lot of things changed

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as locations that

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higher than others became fewer and more .

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rented

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the rented

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flats percentage changed from 7,11% to 22% .

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, staying with friends and family became 44% . Despite

this

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this

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type of accommodation didn't change .

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, in 2008 places where holidaymakers stayed dramatically changed and

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lot

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differences.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

223 words

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