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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates how often individuals in the USA consumed
food
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 in fast
food
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 restaurants
among
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between
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 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, the proportion of
people
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 who
living
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live
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 in that country went
for
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to
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 fast
food
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 restaurants mostly once
in
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apply
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a week and once or twice
in
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apply
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a month ate fast
food
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.
Whereas
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, a minimum amount of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day. Those who ate junk
food
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 every day were under 5% of
proportion
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the proportion
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 and remained in every timeline.
However
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, Several times in a week
were
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was
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 about 17% in 2003, 20% in 2006 and decreased a little and remained in 2013
approximately
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at approximately
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 16%.
Nevertheless
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, more than 30% of
population
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the population
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 used to eat once
in
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apply
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a week in 2003, 33% in 2006 which was the highest and dropped a bit in 2013 just about 28%.
Moreover
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, once or twice in a month in 2003
were
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apply
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30%, decreased
5
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by 5
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% in 2006 and stayed at 33% in 2013. A few times in a year were gradual because
lower
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a lower
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 amount of
people
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 went
for
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to
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 restaurants in 2003, 12% of
people
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 ate fast
food
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,
in
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and in
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 2006 and 2013
were
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apply
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15%.
Additionally
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, those
never
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who never
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 ate fast
food
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 were about 5% in 2003, 2006 and 2013 were below 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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