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The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.

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The pie chart illustrates the
percetages
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percentage
percentages
 of
citizen
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citizens
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 in Canada, categorized into four groups,
people
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 with no
car
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,
one
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car
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,
two
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cars
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 and more than
two
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cars
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.
Overall
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, at first glance,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
people
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 with
one
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car
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 is the highest,
in
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contrast
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contrast,
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people
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 who have more than
two
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cars
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 is the lowest. It is evident that more than half of the
citizen
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citizens
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 in Canada have
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minimom
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minimum
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one
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of one
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car
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.
Moreover
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, the percentage of
people
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 who owned
two
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cars
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 is allocated approximately a quarter of a circle. It is noticeable that almost
twoice
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twice
people
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 have
one
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car
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, compared to those of have
two
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cars
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.
Conversely
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, it becomes clear that
while
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 nearly 30
percent
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per cent
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 of
citizen
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citizens
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 in Canada
has
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have
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 no
cars
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, a few
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 about 5
percent
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per cent
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 have more than
two
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cars
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, one, two, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Percentage
  • Ownership
  • Trend
  • Urban
  • Rural
  • Public transportation
  • Environmental impact
  • Government policies
  • Subsidy
  • Electric cars
  • Cultural attitudes
  • Income level
  • Economic factors
  • Technological advancement
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