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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The data illustrates the amount of
shops
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 that went out of business and the ones that emerged in the time period from 2011-2018 in a country.
Overall
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,
shop
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 closures and
openings
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 during
this
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 duration underwent fluctuations, most notably, a huge dip in
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 closures in 2015,
as well as
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 a sharp decrease in
shop
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openings
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 in 2012. The number of
shops
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 going out of business hovered around the 6000 to 7000 mark during an interval from 2011 to 2014, before experiencing a major fall in 2015 when it went below 1000. In 2016 the numbers went back up to around 5000 and plateaued at that value till 2018.
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, the number of new
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 opening exhibited a decrease much
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earlier
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 compared to that dip reported in the number of closing
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, as it happened as early as 2012 when the numbers fell from approximately 8500 the year before to 4000. After 2012, there was a steady rise until 2014 when the values floated close to 6000
shop
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openings
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. Following that period was another dip that took the numbers back down to 4000. the values stayed there till 2017 before noting a final decrease taking it to as low as 3000 new
shop
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openings
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 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, shop, openings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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